I would change the second problem statement to be: Bullying is a big problem in online gaming among teenagers. Make it as specific as possible, and short and concise.
The third problem statement could be adjusted as follows: Bike users on SFSU campus are unaware of the services that are available to them. This localizes the problem and cuts to the chase. Could even be more specific and refer to a specific service.
The purpose statements look generally good, although the third one is a bit too specific.
I would change the second problem statement to be: Bullying is a big problem in online gaming among teenagers. Make it as specific as possible, and short and concise.
ReplyDeleteThe third problem statement could be adjusted as follows: Bike users on SFSU campus are unaware of the services that are available to them. This localizes the problem and cuts to the chase. Could even be more specific and refer to a specific service.
The purpose statements look generally good, although the third one is a bit too specific.